Aurelia sat quietly in her small fighter.
S,he
kept the power to a minimum, barely
maintaining life support. The battle had gone badly, and the carrier she had launched
from had been totally destroyed. During the battle, she had fought several enemy
fighters and had strafed one of their cruisers.s
H,owever, the guidance and targeting system
had been damaged during the run across the cruiser, and more fighters had targeted
her. She threw her craft about trying to avoid flying in a straight
line, hmaking
it difficult for the enemy craft to
get a weapon lock. During the chase, she
which would enable
the realized she was approaching a
small planetary system.found
T,he
stress was beginning to t
show,
and she could feel the sweat
running from her brow into her eyes.tell
S,he
lifted the visor on her helmet and wiped her eyes to clear
them.s
As she flew past the outer planets, she
noticed on her screen that there was a band of large rocks orbiting
the system’s sun where perhaps a planet had once been. She
dove into this area, and soon she found a large
rock, several kilometres
across.dived
S,he
hid behind it and shuts down her crafts systems
ting to lessen the chance of
detection. She held her breath and
wondered ifso as
had she done enough to shake off her pursuers.,?
As she waited, a group of enemy
fighters passed in loose formation followed by a larger cruiser.
She sat and
hoped the background noise from the planetary system
would mask the minimal energy signature of her reduced life support
system. They flew by and continued on their course hoping away from
her.moving
She assessed the options
open to her.now
T,he small task force she was with had
obviously
t either been destroyed or had managed to
escape the much larger enemy fleet. Either way, no one would be coming for her in
the near future. Her small Fighter had limited range, and she had used at least half of
her fuel during the battle and subsequent escape.been
Her only chance was to find a nearby planet with a breathable
atmosphere, land and set her distress beacon, and hope she would be rescued by
her own side and not captured by the enemy. She thought it would
be best to delay
setting the beacon for a few days to ensure the enemy fleet had
passed by, provided probably she could find a
planet before her power and air ran
out.that is
Her ears were uncomfortable in her helmet.
S,he
had always meant to get it changed but had never gotten around to it. The helmet was
all right for a while but it pinched if she wore it for too long.
She was not intending to go into combat in the foreseeable
future, so she broke regulations and
removed her ill-fitting helmet. Her hair fell across her
eyes, so she impatiently brushed it
back with her hand.s
She had not seen an enemy craft for several
yhours,‘ so
she cautiously increased the power to her computer system and life
support, as the cockpit was getting cold.
She waited ’ a forwhile before increasing the
power further. Her systems did not detect any enemy
ships, so they must have moved away. One
small fighter in an uncharted system far from home was not worth
bothering aboutlonger ..
Aurelia rubbed her cheek.
I,t
was a habit she had when she was under stress;
ever isince she had
been tattooed with the mark of the warrior class to which she now
belonged. She cautiously increased her craft’s power so she could run a scan of
the system she was in. Her scans found that the third planet had a
breathable atmosphere. T he
down side was that her systems detected
a probability that it was inhabited by primitive beings.
Still, she was more than capable of
looking after herself, and they were probably
far too primitive to be of any threat.t
She decided it was time to start the ignition sequence for her
engines. Of the three thrusters her fighter had, only one fired.
This was an unexpected setback she had not bargained
for.
T,here must t have
been more damage than the systems reported. Her craft
would be hard to handle, and
manoeuvring within a planetary atmosphere would be difficult to say
the least. However, she had no choice, as
she would be unable to go to another system with the damage her
craft had suffered.be
Aurelia smiled to herself as she neared the planet she had chosen.
The beings that inhabited the planet had a very primitive detection
technology that she could easily avoid with her fighter’s basic cloaking systems. The only
concern she had as she guided her fighter into the
planet’s upper atmosphere was that
her damaged engines
with would make the landing the rather hard.
She chose a large island off a much larger continent as a landing
site. Hwas going to beer
sensors showed that it had some deserted areas.
I ht and i had the also additional advantage of moving into
the night, so her descent added would not be detected by any one
casually looking up.should
Her craft began to buck as it entered
deeper into the atmosphere.
She
needed all her strength to hold it on her chosen course. As she
neared the ground, she just missed a small
low building she had not detected during her scans. Ist
was not emitting any energy signature as most of the other
buildings on the island i. She finally hit the
surface of the planet harder than she had hoped. Swherehe
was thrown forward against her harness.s
When h,er head, unprotected by a
helmet, struck the main console in front
of her, she passed out.h
I would say an unequivocal yes. You need to be sure your book is as good as you can get it which ever publishing method you chose. Remember that Agents and Publishers are looking for the slightest excuse to reject your manuscript. Ensure it is not through incorrect punctuation, layout or sentence structure.
Below is an example of what an editor can do for you. (The following is a sample from editing work done for me by www.firstediting .com)
EDITOR\'S COMMENTS / NOTES / SUGGESTIONS:
Clive, Thanks for the opportunity to edit your book! Although I had to correct a number of grammatical errors and adjust so much of the punctuation and sentence structure, I think you have a great story here. The subject matter, the insightful narration, and the creative actions and ideas you've expressed have made this a worthwhile book to read and edit. I hope that with this professional touch you will now achieve the success you desire with publication, etc. I would even love to see this book as a movie. The most common grammatical issues that I corrected included: punctuation (especially comma splices/run-on sentences), ordering of phrases, transitional phrasing, tense, dialog format, parallel form, excessive wordiness, redundancy, hedging, and inconsistency. I also made helpful comments to further assist with revision. I wish you the best of luck with publication and I look forward to working with you on future projects!





